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[离任作者] 【我的桃色生活】(十六)

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这么说吧。所以楼主没有很快的把主角母亲推倒,可是却没有那种很自然的延续,让人觉得,楼主是故意的拖延,其实吧,乱文,特别是母子文,直接就肉戏让人烦,可是没有适当的剧情做承托,却一直不推倒,也会让人感到不自然。特别是楼主刚开始写的时候,猪脚母亲貌似就一公共汽车,既然这样设定了,虽然说有挣扎,可是也不用这么久。淫妇也有淫妇的写法啊。为什么要学习贞妇呢?楼主对猪脚母亲的心理的描写还是太薄弱了点,我想主要原因还是刚开始没设定好,毕竟在很多人看来淫妇需要什么挣扎,是棒都可以。也正因为如此,女主是淫妇的文一般都成不了经典。

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